Support and Elaboration

The writer attempts to develop supporting ideas, but she offers too little elaboration throughout. Including sufficient relevant details from the article would strengthen her support and elaboration and meet the requirements of the prompt.

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To Each His Own

   
 
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Although meagerly written, this article captures very well the complicated relationship between these two species is abundant, which intensifies the intricacy of handling this situation. Should we "thin" the population of deer, or should we allow them to proceed in constant multiplication? As explored in "Life on the Edges," a perfectly harmonious balance may never be reached, but why shouldn't we try? We will never eliminate terrorism, but few would say that we should end our war on it.

 
 

As in any altercation, a compromise must be reached between the human race and local deer populations. So far, we have done a somewhat decent job of maintaining a balanced "give and take." However, current efforts don't seem to be enough, do they? Or, is it a balance cannot be reached! Ah, ha! That's it, we will never solve this "problem!" There is no way to please all parties. (All parties meaning deer, environmentalists, and "pro-thinners".)

 
 

In personal experience, I can identify with both extremes. Yes, I am from the "country" where almost everyone (well, almost all males — another interesting aspect of this issue. Why don't more women hunt? But, I won't get into that now.) Not only am I a country girl, "but two of my families vehicles have been run into by deer (yes, the deer ran into the side of both vehicles as we were driving) and this is expensive. I, also, know people who have had their gardens plundered by gnawing white-tails. So, thinking on that side it certainly seems like life would be better if deer were an endangered species that lived only in zoos and preservatory areas. However, whenever I watch Bambi, I sympathize with the seemingly helpless creatures. They are just hungry, and scared, and following their instincts for goodness sake.

 
 
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In conclusion; seeing both sides, knowing the problem will never be solved, and regarding the fact that this relationship will remain complicated, what should we do? I agree with what the author of the given passage seems to be saying (although, her conveyance is vague.) we should just allow things to continue as they are. People who wish to hunt should be able to do so. People who wish to feed and create safe-havens for deer should be able to do so. Bambi should remain in production, as should hunting video games, like Cabella's Big Game Hunter. My response can be summed up in one cliché – to each his own!